[Twinsen] Bad sentence structure
Posted: Tue Mar 22, 2016 10:08 pm
In-game, researching the tech 'combat robotics':
"Combat robotics help to fight the enemy with their guns.
They are spawned from the capsules and have a limited lifetime. Some follow the player"
Is "their guns" referring to the enemy alien guns or the robot guns. I would recommend a change to something along the lines of the following:
"Combat robots are equipped with guns to help fight the enemy" (alt. "aliens" instead of "enemy")
"Combat robots are spawned from capsules and have a limited life time. Some robots can follow the player."
"Combat robotics help to fight the enemy with their guns.
They are spawned from the capsules and have a limited lifetime. Some follow the player"
Is "their guns" referring to the enemy alien guns or the robot guns. I would recommend a change to something along the lines of the following:
"Combat robots are equipped with guns to help fight the enemy" (alt. "aliens" instead of "enemy")
"Combat robots are spawned from capsules and have a limited life time. Some robots can follow the player."